Thursday, September 9, 2010

"The Mouse in the Cafe Short Story"

About 4 days ago in a little cafe down the street from my house there was noone around but a little tiny mouse named Gus-Gus. Gus-Gus was a poor little mouse who had nothing to eat in over a week he was starving. One day he couldn't take it any longer and when the cafe refrigerator was opened his chance was given. He sprinted to into the fridge and stoped with a long pause. He thought that he was in heaven because all he saw was cheese all around him. Gus-Gus grabed the cheese and ate as much as he could. He ate and ate and ate when he was full and was rubbing his belly ready to get up and move the fridge door made a "clash" the door was closed! Gus-Gus tryed to get under the door bu he was so fat and full that he couldn't get under it. Gus-Gus started to cry and scream for help. He thought that noone would hear him. Outside the door was a little female mouse who heared Gus-Gus scream. She went under the door and saw him sitting in the center crying. She asked him " Do you need help?" Gus-Gus without looking said yes. He wipped his face and looked up and saw the most eutiful female mouse ever. The little mouse climed up the fridge door and unlocked the swich. Th little mouse and Gus-Gus ran out of there when they heared keys slamming agianst the wooden door. From that day forword the cafe was silent and noone was around.

2 comments:

  1. The ending was a bit confusing. Remember to proofread and edit your work before posting it. Failure to do so will continue to result in loss of points.

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  2. Thats cute, I like it. Cheese mmmm, not only sounds good for the mouse, but for me too.

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